from the hierarchy
of rub: flight or fight
anyone? an outburst
without shadow never
razor burns
stories ricochet
all over the face, the structure
of being overwhelmed
the old brainhall swinging
away at old age anxiety
relax—aloe or no
smile, the authentic package
a new look, cleans up
16 ounces non greasy
essentially fragrant free
each adventure be by
a shave, biochemical
and alive
by a hair
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Revamped from older poem below
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Comfortable to the Skin
In the hierarchy of rub: flight
Anyone? An outburst or significant after
With shadow, it never gets a nighttime outcome
stories+events+STORIES
ricocheting the structure, being woke
Overwhelmed in the same old brainhall
swinging more of the age anxiety
paddlers approval—relax
aloe or no
Authentically close package
a new look, clean
non-greasy, 16 ounces
and imaginatively fragrance free
each made adventure
biochemical be
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for Poets and Storytellers United Friday Writings #159:Making It New
I like the original, and I love the revamp! (I also love the word 'revamp', preferring it to 'remix'.)
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