My
charcoal conspires
with an incalescent breath, a molten
wind
rushing over your
concrete drive like a lover
hastily
reddening
her three-alarm
lips, I have
what you burn
for and
drag it
through the oily streets, my flame
draws its tongue
across the sclera
of your briquette
eyes. Eyes
sizzling deep in your
pyromantic face. Intent, I fly
from your
window,
back-drafted,
you are my bed-wetter
by sadism, scratching your fingers
over the
warning: close cover
before striking. You
suffer
my
advance until you wake, chained
to my exothermic reaction, the heat
between us is
ripe enough
to
pick, our fruit
twists like a pillar of fire
and our wandering
voices blaze
Woo! That is some great verb action!
ReplyDeletewhew...you brought the heat this evening...every line ratcheting up intensity...well done, nice line breaks as well...you used your verbs well....
ReplyDeletequite the scene you describe...and the (e) motions provided with such great verbs!
ReplyDeleteThis is full of passion and heat. Very intense and vivid.
ReplyDeleteoh my goodness.... full of energy and heaty intensity...whew...
ReplyDeleteStrong verbs and visuals here! Bravo.
ReplyDeleteWow, this comes alive.
ReplyDeletePhew. "...the heat
ReplyDeletebetween us is [indeed] ripe enough
to pick...." Great use of inflammatory verbs to energize your incandescent poem.
That was quite a reaction... great use of verbs.
ReplyDeleteincalescent - love that word. smoking write, Gila Mon ~
ReplyDeleteThe energy created by your verbs leaps off the page and makes this poem very, very memorable.
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